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75 comments:

  1. Loving this so far - a great intro! You have managed to hook me even though I have absolutely no idea what's going on ... quite a clever balancing act. Really looking forward to finding out why Rainbow jumped out the window (and why she's called Rainbow), what happened to Noah, what their link with Len is. Oh, and obviously I'm hoping for a salacious sub-plot involving Boblet, too.

    My only (small) criticism is that the red writing on the black background is quite difficult to read, especially given the fact that some bright spark decided about 5 years ago that laptop screens needed to be reflective. I had to strain to see past my own grumpy reflection. It does look visually impressive though, and I guess black-on-white's quite boring - but maybe a link to a plain text black-on-white version for boring readers with eye strain? :D

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    1. Thanks loads for this! I take your point on the red writing. My brother said this too. It's on my list to change; slightly regrettably 'cause, as you say, it looks quite cool, I thought! xx

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  2. Hello! Oooh exciting project. Very funny, love the contrast of descriptive language with blunt colloquialism. Eagerly awaiting next installment. Agree about black background, I nearly got one of those tension headaches. Jane x

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    1. Thanks, Jane!I'm going to change the font & colour scheme when I post the next 'chunk', and hope it's an improvement. And I need to get a move on 'cause I'm still writing the next chunk. What the hell have I taken on?! xx

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  3. Hi Sara, I'm so proud of you writing a novel on-line... it's an exciting and adventurous project and I'm hoping you get a varied 'hooked' audience !!
    I agree with the other comments about the red on black (although the upper and lower case in your story is a lot easier to read than the commentaries in CAPS :-)
    I love your style of writing, its humorous, descriptive and intriguing... and I am far from being an expert in this subject and I rarely get to read, but I want more ! That's the most important achievement... to keep peoples interest, get them reading until the end of each 'chunk' and to want the next instalment !!
    I love the names you have chosen, the smeggy settings are described in a way that you can, smell and feel them. What I love the most is that your writing is so 'YOU' !! I can hear you saying the words and some phrases you use in real life.. naturally you :-) xxx Zeem

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    1. Thank U, my lovely sister. What would I do without you & your comments?! This may seem a bit over-dramatic but I am quite nervous about this escapade and you're really buouying me up, so thanks loads. P.s. Can you be my publicist?! xxx

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  4. What a brilliant intro and story so far and I want more. Have to say the red is not doing my eyes any good but whatever colour you go for I will have to read the next instalment. I would be also be very happy to share this on my blog. Waves to Zeem xx Just going to subscribe so I don't miss the next bit.
    Krishenka

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    1. I really appreciate your comments, thanks so much! I've now changed the colour scheme & pics. Let me know what you think? I hope it's an improvement, and not too bizarre... (I do like oddity!) I hope to post the next instalment in the next couple of days. Sorry you had problems joining the blog. I've no idea why that would be (I'm not very techno) but I hope it lets you, next attempt? All the best, Sx

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  5. Can't subscribe for some reason, it's telling my the server is ill!

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  6. Despite the fact that I should be packing my bags for a weekend away I had to pop over and see if you had posted the next instalment. Just finished reading it and I can only be left to imagine what will happen when the bar opens and Bea of course will be delighted to show her the ropes!!!!! Hope her chicken fillets stay put. x

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    1. I'm so grateful for all the comments, this is what I need! x

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  7. I'm absolutely loving it! please hurry with the next installment *mwah*

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    1. Love u, Snooze. Do you think every 10 days-ish is a reasonable schedule for posting? You don't need to answer, just thinking aloud. I think I've got writer's block already! Not really. xx

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  8. Good start, Sara - lots of questions, plunged in. Looking forward to finding out where we're going next...
    m x

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  9. yehhh sounds great 10 days :-)

    Will pervy Eddie keep his hands off her chicken fillets ?
    Will Bea change her manky T shirt ?
    Will Leonard ever wake up ?

    But seriously.... it's easy to read, light and intriguing !

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    1. Hope you get some answers to these questions! xxx

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  10. Another good read Sara and I am now a fully fledged hater of Bea even changing her manky t-shirt doesn't change my opinion of her!! My subscription worked and your email popped in this morning. I am still intrigued by this and already waiting for the next part. xx

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  11. Lots to unravel here. Looking forward to it. Have given your blog a mention in my blog. Brave lady to expose your work like this but a wonderful idea. Next instalment eagerly awaited. Love the guinea pig, reminds me of my two!

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    1. Thanks so much for your support! And for the considerate mention on your blog too. I'll be checking out your content when I've had some sleep. All the very best, S :0)

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  12. Great stuff... I feel like I'm there in the pub and can imagine the smell and probably the sticky floor !! :-) It reminds me of many haunts we have visited over the years... in our younger days, that is !
    The 'chunks' are a good length (for me anyway)... I spend all day at work on the computer and try to keep evening screen viewing to a minimum (although, it doesn't always work out like that)....
    xx

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    1. *Mwah*!!xxx
      I'll be posting a same-size chunk, hopefully 2morro. :0)

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  13. Hey Sara,

    I'm loving your novel. Like others have said it really captures your imagination and reels you in. I will definitely be waiting with baited breath for the next installment!
    X

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  14. Wouldn't let me add a pic : (
    It's Josephine incase you wondered who jaybird was! Haha x

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    1. I love the 'Jaybird' tag! I wondered if it was you. Thanks loads for taking the time to comment. I think you need to be a 'blogger' to have a 'profile pic'? Then again, I think my brother managed to get round it somehow... I'm rubbish on these things. x

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  15. Your wish is granted take 14 days if fact take as long as you like just keep it going. You have so much going on here that I need 14 days to try and figure a few things out. Can I set up a hate page for Bea? Already I am anticipating the next chunk. xx

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  16. Oh my word, so much imagery and yet so much action! Amazing characters too, don't know how you fit it all in. On first read, not sure about the student asking where the stripper is... Doesn't quite ring true, not sure why. Think the part where Bea undoes her top works without it (and is brilliant!). Still glued. Can understand why you want 14 days. I can wait- just about! Love you xxx

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  17. I'm really enjoying reading you Sara... the pub scene was full of description and action and as much as its not an everyday event to have someone fall through the roof in the middle of a flirting session with students in drag.... I believe, I can imagine it happening lol
    Wierd and wonderful things do happen at times and you captured the 2 situations wrapped up together perfectly !

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  18. I agree with the others, 14 days is fine, just keep at it! If it's a bit late, so be it, yet it's nice to have some sort of deadline to keep motivated. Looking forward to next part.

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  19. Thanks to everyone who recently commented, it really means a lot to me. You're keeping me going! Suze, I might whip out the stripper for you :0) xx

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  20. Soup, water and fairy lights! a hungry rainbow, and well will just have to wait patiently for the party to begin and what that will bring us. You are still holding my attention Sarah and still loving it. xxx

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  21. Any student who read this part would relate...
    Marshall is finding Rainbow 'bizarre' and how very true is that... in this day and age, anyone who doesn't drink alcohol is immediately classed as an 'oddball' !! Has she got a good reason to avoid alcohol ? I think Marshall would want to know... it's just not 'normal' :-)

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    1. Keep reading! The plot will inevitably thicken... it aint called ABNORMAL for nothing ;))) xx

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  22. All good, well done - interested to know where the The Badger is, as I haven't had a pint of Lowenbrau since 1995..! :-)

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    1. What pint of Lowenbrau?? You must be seeing things, check it out. Hahaha. Thanks for reading! x

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    1. It was my OWN comment though, and in the wrong place! :)

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  24. Well your not giving much away and I still don't know what happened to the landlord for the moment, and well, will have to be patient until next time, still enjoying it very much Sara

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  25. I agree, not giving much away... but I like that. Setting the scene, creating the atmosphere and giving us food for thought ! I sort of wanted them to get off with each other... I don't know why but I felt disappointed that she didn't seem interested... but I suppose they have just met. Maybe its because I would have been more of a big hussie HE HE HE x

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  26. Oooh, I think I like installment 7 the best so far! Loving the whole atmosphere you're creating, and I'm disappointed when I get to the end of each installment. This can only be a good thing xxx

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    1. Thanks Suzi. I was a bit worried that this chunk was a bit too long (for internet reading). So glad you're sticking with me. Thanks for the comment & hope you are okay! xx

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  27. omg this is totally brilliant Sarah I was on the edge of my seat reading the entire lot, there is so much more going on here under the surface and I commend you for intriguing me so much. I do hope that I will see this story printed in a real hold in hands book. Fantastic xx

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    1. Thanks, Chrissie! I hope so too! I better get a head start on the next chapter because I'm worried that the house of cards might all fall down. :0// Hopefully not though :0))) xxx

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  28. Enjoyed this instalment. It's coming along nicely. Looking forward to the next one.

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  29. I got behind reading the blog..what with one thing and another.... and I have just read 3 chunks in one go ! It was great.. to get a continuation of the story that lasted. I quite liked that.. especially as I 'got-into-it' and wanted a bit more than we normally have. So... this time, I did well to have accumulated 'my read' :-)
    I don't know about anyone else.. but I really feel like I can see the scenes and even though there are many things we don't know about Rainbow.. I do feel quite close to her. I'm pretty sure all this is down to your descriptive writing, scene setting and deep and unique way that you describe her thoughts, feelings, sensations and observations !
    Well done so far !!! x

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    1. Thanks for this, Zeem! These comments make all the difference to this project and I'm really glad that it's coming across well. I do have a penchant for description and imagery & feel it's important in storytelling. Chuffed to hear it seems to be doing the trick xx :0))

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  30. I read the first chapter and then restrained from reading the rest because I like long reads ! So I've just read it all and it's great, because I want to know what's going to happen next !!! Keep it up !! Angela

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    1. Ahhh, thanks for that! This was always going to be a potential problem with writing the novel in slight instalments. Because it's not the usual way we read books... My b/f also pointed out that he (& others) would likely forget what had gone before by having to wait a fortnight! But your system maybe gets around that problem?! This project/method is experimental in that way so I guess we'll just have to see how it goes. Thanks for commenting! x

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  31. Just got round to reading this latest installment, Really enjoyed it. I'm fascinated to know why Rainbow can only eat liquidised food! Guess I'll have to keep reading to find out. Agree with other comments that I can picture the scenes. Good stuff.

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    1. Thanks so much, Heather, for continuing to read and comment! next instalment is just up. S x

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  32. Brilliant, bloody brilliant I was late in reading sorry lots going on but Sarah this is good really good. Love and energy to you and merry xmas can't wait for the next one .xx

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    1. Happy new year, Chrissie! And thanks for saying this. I love you! Next instalment is up now. xx

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  33. Oh my if this book is not published I will eat my hat. I nearly said where on earth is she from, then thought nope she is defo from another planet! and well again you have added further intrigue to the story. What is going on with the will? Patience I tell myself, and again await eagerly the next instalment. Have to tell you that never before have I ever read a book during the day and on my computer. xx

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  34. I love the cliff hanger! Another good instalment. You know how to draw things out. I want more. Like Chrissie I shall have to be patient! Good luck with your writing in 2013.

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  35. I'm snowed in and what better than to have an instalment waiting for me ! I can understand Marshall finding her innocence/naivety endearing ... I'm quite sure 'men' would find that attractive or cute.
    Fallen-out-of-nowhere miss rainbow ! I would think it impossible to have never been in a car before... not in this day and age. Very intriguing :-) Wouldn't Marshall grill her, be utterly amazed and bewildered... maybe he did, but we wouldn't know as the story skipped back to Lens place !! See... you got me thinking eh !!

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  36. Oh my what did she do to him? I have read every instalment on the day I got it and this one slipped by a few days as I have been very busy but just finished it. Already I am itching for the next part. Go Sara xxx

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  37. You can't leave it there! Wow. Can't wait for the next instalment - hope it will be soon...please!

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  38. It gets better and better as the story unfolds. Oooo! Next one please!

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    1. Thanks again, Heather. I'm getting a bit into it myself now! ;) Take care, S

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  39. I am with you on that Heather I just finished work and been looking forward all day to read it, and well what can I say Sara, its still as intriguing as was the first and every other instalment that followed. I will wait patiently for the next. xx

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    1. Your comments, and all others, really keeping me going. I really appreciate the support! Now we're getting somewhere with the story it's more enjoyable to write too; my confidence is growing a bit. I like this stage of a book, reading or writing! Thanks again :0))

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  40. Oh my I think I will have to read this again and I want to head butt Watson, what a Pity the stiletto didn't pierce his head. Fantastic Sara this as I have said before just gets better. xxxxxx

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  41. Enjoyed this part more than the last. I like the interaction between Rainbow and Marshall and there was more intrigue which makes me want to read on.

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    1. Thanks, Heather. It's great, and helpful, that you've said this because I felt a little unsure about that last instalment; not entirely sure why. So it's positive when someone feels the opposite! The beauty of subjectivity. x

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  42. I love the descriptions in paragraph two, very poetic! Waiting to see what happens next.

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    1. Sorry for the late response. New instalment nearly ready! I'm glad you like the poetic elements in this instalment. This is my favoured way of writing but time doesn't always allow me to do it! Thanks for commenting. Sx

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  43. Another instalment and again a great read, just loved the para where rainbow is dreaming and rolling the moon, your descriptions are so visual and well I await the next instalment xxx As Heather said in a previous comment very poetic.

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    1. Sorry for taking so long to reply. Thanks again, Chrissie! Your constant encouragement keeps me going, keeps me motivated. Next instalment is late but imminent. Hope you are okay! xx

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  44. I have just has a huge sunday catch up session ! Some rare 'time-alone' enabled me to get stuck in !! Love it and feel very attached to the characters. Your story is intriguing and captivating !
    My eyes are hurting though :-( Not used to reading on screen, not sure if it was the quantity I read or the size or the colours... but I struggled. I find the white text blurs/doubles after staring at thescreen too long. Does anyone else find it hard ? In fact, just looking at the text of the comments is easier... maybe the typeface doesn't help as it has 'serifs'...

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    1. Sorry I didn't reply to this! Thanks for the lovely comments! :) I think the screen-reading / fonts / colours on blog etc is an ongoing issue that I suppose I've been half-hoping would blow away... BUT! I'm working on possibly making the instalments available in PDF on my original website too, so that folks have other 'reading' options :) I appreciate you mentioning it. It's hard to marry a stylish atmospheric blog 'look' with a reader-friendly format. Sadly. But you do have a point. S x

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  45. Another relaxing catch up session for me !!
    I am so enjoying this read.... you are doing such a great writing job.. I really hope you get recognition for this work !! xxx

    ‘Did you get to keep those extra fingers?’

    HA HA HA... they may come in handy ;-)

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    1. Hahaha, they may well have come in handy, yes! Sorry but now you're up to date i've just stuck another instalment up! Thanks for your lovely comments, it means a lot. Timely too coz I've been wanting to slit my throat this week. Speak soon, xx

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  46. Well now just what is she going to do that was a stotter installment :) Still hanging on to find out where this is going, and loving each and ever word you write....

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    1. Thanx so much, C! I'm posting the next one in the next hour, I hope! Glad you're back all safe & sound and had a lovely time, by the sounds of things! :) xx

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